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Jessica WIP by MatthewMcIntosh Jessica WIP by MatthewMcIntosh
This is a WIP of a commission I'm currently working on. I've since scratched this version and started on another one. The problem I have is that the likeness was lost from the sketch to the inks.
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:icondevlin2010:
Nice dude, only thing I would say in regard to likeness is in the first intial sketch she looks young and you can tell by the features i.e. the nose,lips and definition of the breast (by this I mean the underline giving the sense of them being 'perky') whereas in the 2nd coloured version she looks older, the nose shape changed,the shading on the cheek/face makes her look older than the intial sketch and the definition of the breasts is lost in the shading? Hope this makes sense and I don't want it to sound like i'm being over critical :/ still a good job and obviously this is just my opinion as I don't know how the character is meant to look!
With the ratings I would give all 4 stars if the transition from sketch to final piece was flawless, but we all have room for improvement. The reason I gave 3 for impact is that the piece itself seems dark,whether it's meant to be like that I'm not entirely sure but my eye line is drawn to the shine on the breast and takes away from the rest of the piece.
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I really loved this picture, it catches your eyes immediately and everything looks stunning. The only thing you could work on is shading, perhaps more shadows underneath her breast as shown on the left picture. I also don't know if this was intentional, but it seems like her clothing has a metallic property, if thats not what your going for good job. I also think that the light source coming from the right should be reflected on the rim of the glasses and on a small edge of her hair. Its just the tiny details that you need work on, because you have a clear grip on proportion and such. One last suggestion is to add detail on to the belt. Other thant that nice job
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SKJeter Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011  Professional General Artist
Very nice! I enjoy seeing it go from mere sketch to, completed awesomeness.
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whatamiwhoami Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011
awesome
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devlin2010 Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Nice dude, only thing I would say in regard to likeness is in the first intial sketch she looks young and you can tell by the features i.e. the nose,lips and definition of the breast (by this I mean the underline giving the sense of them being 'perky') whereas in the 2nd coloured version she looks older, the nose shape changed,the shading on the cheek/face makes her look older than the intial sketch and the definition of the breasts is lost in the shading? Hope this makes sense and I don't want it to sound like i'm being over critical :/ still a good job and obviously this is just my opinion as I don't know how the character is meant to look!
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psypher101 Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2011  Professional Digital Artist
I agree entirely with this. She looks too old in the colored piece. If you wanna add some lighting to her face, stay away from hard lines and use an airbrush to add some soft shading. Also, avoid any detail around the nose aside from establishing it's shape obviously the nostrils.

Finally, make sure your lighting is consistent. The direct light source is clearly established due to the specular bright spot on her left breast and shoulder, but you don't keep it consistent. Remember that objects cast shadows. So her breasts should cast shadow over the top of her abdomen and her hair could also cast some soft shadows.

Where's the link to the updated version?
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MatthewMcIntosh Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you for the critique. You're absolutely right on all points!
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devlin2010 Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
No problem :)
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